I do quite adore your poetry darling, I'm not sure why, maybe because I constantly find a connection within my life or something along the lines of that stuff. [insert expressive words here] So anyway. Well done once again. Take care, have a good holiday

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@~"I don't want realism! I want magic!"~@

you too

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everything seems so perfect, so serene, so beautiful.
i'm thinking of you.

admin@pixelphish.net

wonderful piece it's strange how the mind works and emotions...well done

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love nessie.xx

you're lost 'til you're found..but i'm for ever lost..

very expressive, wonderful piece, i know how you feel

omg that ia amazing, that's exactly how I feel well expect ahveing someone sleeping next to me... But I really like this. +fav!

yeah... i know how that is....

It's very good that you use writing as a catharsis (), but wouldn't this be more appropriate as a journal entry?

yeah, prolly, but it's a thought i have often.

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everything seems so perfect, so serene, so beautiful.
i'm thinking of you.

admin@pixelphish.net

It still would be better to have it as an entry ... you can't just state your feelings straight out (that's more " proselike" ... not the quotemarks, I am not using the term literally) and call it poetry. The real fun and help of poetry is to mutilate it, turn it around, find new ways to express it that we would have never tried otherwise. That's also when it becomes art. Everyone needs personal venting, but if you don't really have a message (or if you're not trying to say it), journal entries are a great alternate option.

I'm sorry if I sounded rude, long winded, insulting, holier-than-thou or anything else negative, that was not my intention at all. But ... things like this are to me what school notebook sketches or webcam photos, etc., are to many people on dA. They are more than fine in themselves ... but how appropriate are they for where they are placed?